Thanks everyone for your comments! Based on the feedback, I'm doing the following:
Breaking down the original video into four discrete segments: Intro (the original first 6 minutes or so up through products, brushes and razors, and general technique. It'll also have more discussion of the "Zen" and pleasure of traditional wetshaving), Lathering, Shaving, and Aftershave Care.
Re-shooting some of the lathering segment to be more consistant (using the same cream when generating lather with a boar brush and a badger brush). Also reshooting some of the shaving segment for a more even/slower shaving pace and going through a four-pass shave.
Adding some additional video with close-ups of lathering and shaving.
"Tightening" and "brightening" the narration.
It'll probably take me a week or so to make the changes, then I'll post a link to "take two." Interestingly, there have been 300+ views of the video so far.
I do indeed plan to make several, more in-depth, productions: proper shave prep and aftershave care, brushes, DE razors, misc. techniques (brush pre-charging, blade buffing, J-hooking, etc.), Method shaving, and straight razor shaving. As "hot topics" arise on the discussion boards, I may do a "video blog" with my take on the issue.